This looks like a trap. I can tell by the suspicious nature of that bag and from seeing quite a few traps in my time. All executed by me of course.
But curiosity is stronger! Could be a beer can in there!
Or better yet, yaoi!
….-crosses fingers-…
This is seriously one of my favorite pages of all I’ve seen you draw so far. It may be partly the art, partly the magic, and partly because of who the two characters are.
I just read through your pages so far. I really like your artwork.
I also like how you’ve paced your story so far. It has given me an impression of how the girl’s ordinary life is, before ending up in this “different” world.
I enjoy how you mix the (fairly) serious story with some well-placed puns and humor, without letting it degenerate into an endless series of silly jokes. In particular the comment about “this was now how I imagined my revenge”.
There are also a number of unanswered questions hanging in the air. I’m looking forward to see how the story unfolds.
A little more shading in the background of panel four would make the magic bag stand out much better and show a bit of mood. Love the artwork, and the dialogue is great! Many lovehearts for panel three!
Yours truly,
Para
Thank you for the comments everyone! I`m terribly new to all this but I try to keep notes on things like panel formation and shading techniques and hopefully my work will improve in later chapters! Hopefully it won`t get boring either. *laughs*
Very nice so far, I’m gonna keep an eye on this one ;) It’s very cute and the backgrounds are pretty darn good!
To make something stand out a bit more, (like the bag) Just make the line around it thicker and darker, or try other stuff. Make it a learning experience and just remember to always do your best!
Keep up the good work!
Looking great! I really like the panel where Denny checks on the ‘mysterious stranger’ >> <<
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This looks like a trap. I can tell by the suspicious nature of that bag and from seeing quite a few traps in my time. All executed by me of course.
But curiosity is stronger! Could be a beer can in there!
Or better yet, yaoi!
….-crosses fingers-…
This is seriously one of my favorite pages of all I’ve seen you draw so far. It may be partly the art, partly the magic, and partly because of who the two characters are.
I just read through your pages so far. I really like your artwork.
I also like how you’ve paced your story so far. It has given me an impression of how the girl’s ordinary life is, before ending up in this “different” world.
I enjoy how you mix the (fairly) serious story with some well-placed puns and humor, without letting it degenerate into an endless series of silly jokes. In particular the comment about “this was now how I imagined my revenge”.
There are also a number of unanswered questions hanging in the air. I’m looking forward to see how the story unfolds.
A little more shading in the background of panel four would make the magic bag stand out much better and show a bit of mood. Love the artwork, and the dialogue is great! Many lovehearts for panel three!
Yours truly,
Para
Thank you for the comments everyone! I`m terribly new to all this but I try to keep notes on things like panel formation and shading techniques and hopefully my work will improve in later chapters! Hopefully it won`t get boring either. *laughs*
Very nice so far, I’m gonna keep an eye on this one ;) It’s very cute and the backgrounds are pretty darn good!
To make something stand out a bit more, (like the bag) Just make the line around it thicker and darker, or try other stuff. Make it a learning experience and just remember to always do your best!
Keep up the good work!
Looking great! I really like the panel where Denny checks on the ‘mysterious stranger’ >> <<